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We have a lot of work coming up for the World of Warships Wiki, again We need your help...again!

I need a new Wiki Editor to join the team to help with wiki article creation, maintenance, and upkeep. The Official World of Warships Wiki Team is a small bunch of dedicated players that have been maintaining the World of Warships Wiki since May of 2016. I only have one spot available, and your entry will be judged by the other Wiki Editors as well as myself. Here's the entry that needs to be created:

Describe, in 500 words or more, the service history of the Brooklyn-Class light cruiser, USS Brooklyn.

Your entry will be judged on grammar, accuracy of the subject matter, spelling, ability to display understanding of the subject matter, ability to convey understanding of the subject matter, and prose.

 

Benefits of Being a Wiki Editor:

- You get to test ships sometimes months before release for article creation, same as a Community Contributor

- Automatic invitation to the Community Contributor Clan

- Automatic reception of the Coo of Boom Flag

 

The Rules:

  • No plagiarism. Automatic disqualification if noted. 
  • Wargaming gains exclusive rights to the contest ideas when you post it on the forum, as outlined in the “11. User Generated Content” section of the Terms of Service.
  • By submitting your entry, you agree to the Wargaming Official Rules.
  • Any violations of the above rules will disqualify your entry.
  • Also, bear in mind I reserve the ability to make the final judgement call.
  • DEADLINE: Wednesday 03/14 at 10:00 AM Central Time.
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Wow, another one so soon? I'm looking forward to the all the high quality entries this contest will have. Good luck to all of you!

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7 minutes ago, Pigeon_of_War said:

Describe, in 500 words or more, the service history of the Brooklyn-Class light cruiser.

Which of the seven ones? Or all of them?

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3 minutes ago, DerKaiserliche said:

Wow, another one so soon? I'm looking forward to the all the high quality entries this contest will have. Good luck to all of you!

Last one was 5 months ago, so this is a relatively normal pattern. 

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So where do we submit it and how long is preferred... I could do a very long one but what does WG prefer (750)?

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11 minutes ago, SireneRacker said:

Which of the seven ones? Or all of them?

I went and edited to be more concise

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I'm definitely looking forward towards some high quality articles in the coming days :cap_book:Good luck to those who participate :D

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Good luck guys! Have fun, and write some good stuff! :Smile_great:

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Huh. Might be worth a shot. I need to get back into writing anyway - the wife is nudging me to harness the literary Muse.

 

Unfortunately, sometimes she doesn't like to be harnessed.

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Best of luck to everyone participating :Smile_honoring:

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@Pigeon_of_War

Attention to detail is one of my assets (flaws?).  When I see errors on official information pages, it irks me.  I also enjoy the occasional research project.  So, this opportunity intrigues me.  I do have a few questions, however.

How many Wiki editors are there, currently?

What duties are they expected to fulfill?

I understand time commitment will vary between individuals, but can you shed some light on what kind of time commitment is involved?

Are Wiki editors solely responsible for creating new content, or is it a collaborative effort between them and the big bosses?

Basically, how does all of this work???

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4 minutes ago, desmo_2 said:

@Pigeon_of_War

Attention to detail is one of my assets (flaws?).  When I see errors on official information pages, it irks me.  I also enjoy the occasional research project.  So, this opportunity intrigues me.  I do have a few questions, however.

How many Wiki editors are there, currently?

What duties are they expected to fulfill?

I understand time commitment will vary between individuals, but can you shed some light on what kind of time commitment is involved?

Are Wiki editors solely responsible for creating new content, or is it a collaborative effort between them and the big bosses?

Basically, how does all of this work???

I'll let @SeaRaptor00 field these since he is the Official Wiki Leader. Not that I can't I just love to delegate work when I can :fish_aqua:

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@Pigeon_of_War 

Will you add something along the lines of "ease of reading" to the factors being judged upon? I'm not sure if that's included in the "ability to convery..." requirement. As a person who enjoys reading the historical info related to ships, having a long-winded article detailing every asinine thing a ship did during it's service, can almost be as bad as an article telling you too little. Sure, a highly detailed article examining the service record of a ship is cool, but an over-saturation of information will only serve to confuse or detach the casual reader from the overarching story. 

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11 minutes ago, Avalon304 said:

Do we post it here?

If it's the same as last time (which it most likely is) then yes, you post your submissions in this thread within a spoiler.

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Hello fellow Captains, I'll leave my entry below.

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Brooklyn Class Cruiser(CL-40)

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Introduction:

The USS Brooklyn, designated (CL-40) was the first ship of the seven Brooklyn class light cruisers. She had a top speed of 32.5 knots and had a crew compliment of 868. CL-40 was commissioned in September 30, 1936 primarily in response to the I.J.N. Mogami class cruiser. Brooklyn had an armor belt that consisted of five inches with her deck armor consisting of two inches. The turret layout of the Brooklyn consisted of five main battery turrets of three(5x3) and a total ship weight of under 10,000 tons with 12,207 tons being loaded.

Pre World War Two:

Before World War Two began, Brooklyn would be involved in several naval training missions along Guantanamo Bay, Cuba. After this she would rejoin the main fleet at the Panama Canal and proceed to sail around for the openings of landmarks across America and conduct salvage and rescue operations. In 1940, Brooklyn joined the Pacific Fleet and went on a tour in the south pacific only later to join the Atlantic squadron.In July 1941, she was tasked with escorting a convoy of Marines to Iceland's capital, Reykjavik. For the remainder of 1941 she would continue to conduct escort and patrol duties in the Western Atlantic.

World War Two Service:

Once World War Two began, Brooklyn was immediately assigned to the patrol the Caribbean Sea until April, 1942. It was there where she would share convoy escort duty with the United Kingdom's Royal Navy. During one of Brooklyn's escorts, American Troop Transport USS Wakefield took damage from Japanese bombers, however Wakefield would survive and head towards Keppel Harbor to refuel and repair. An internal fire later would cause Wakefield to be abandoned with Brooklyn rescuing over 1,000 soldiers. Later in October of 1942, Brooklyn would see action in North Africa during the landing section of Operation Torch. In 1943, Brooklyn actually rendezvoused with the famous USS Iowa(BB-61) as an escort ship from the Gibraltar straights to the Atlantic. Following the events of Operation Torch, Brooklyn would see action in the Naval Battle of Casablanca suffering minor damage to the ship and crew. Already used to escort duties she would again return to convoy escort duties towards North Africa. During 1944, Brooklyn would return to the Mediterranean to assist with Operation Shingle and landing operations in the area. Her efforts during Operation Shingle were crucial for breaking up the Italian Campaign's stalemate. However the initial attack at Anzio had been halted by Axis forces forcing Brooklyn to return again. Around November of 1944, Brooklyn would finish the war would practicing for the invasion of France as well as participating in Operation Dragoon. Her role in Operation Dragoon was to assist in the pre-invasion bombing and artillery strikes.

Aftermath:

After The War Brooklyn would return home to United States Navy Yard for repairs and new construction plans. In addition Brooklyn received many commendations for her efforts in the war However due to the changes and needs in the Navy, Brooklyn was eventually placed out of commission in 1947 and she was transferred to the Chilean Navy in 1951. Bearing a new namesake O'Higgins, and serving another long 40 years, one of her main battery turrets is being conserved at a Chilean naval base.

 

Sources Uses:

https://www.uboat.net/allies/warships/ship/2566.html

http://www.historyofwar.org/articles/weapons_brooklyn_class_cruisers.html

https://www.onwar.com/weapons/warships/boats/USS_BrooklynCL40.html

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/USS_Brooklyn_(CL-40)

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here it my submission, @Pigeon_of_War 

 

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Military Service History of USS Brooklyn (CL-40)

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was named as a city in New York, was the 1st of the seven of her class, and her code letters was November Alfa Kilo Tango

launch and design 

She was ordered on February 13, 1929, and was launched at November 30th, 1936, by New York Navy Yard, and was commissioned on a month later (September 30, 1937), by captain W.D. Brereton, Jr. she was built under the constraints of the Washington Naval Arms Limitation Treaty (which, after World War 1, limits the size of the gun- caliber of each nation main weight at tonnage, caliber, and speed, and how many each nation were allowed to have how much of each type of warships) and is authorized by Congress in 1933, 3 years after the London Naval Treaty (which it limited the construction of heavy cruisers) 

The ships was constructed with flush-decked hull, high transom, built-in hanger, and five triple 6 inch guns, 3 front, and 2 aft, with turrets II and IV in super-firing positions (above turrets' I and III ) to be a response to the Japanese heavily armed light cruisers like the Furataka and Aoba class, with the same gun layout to the Myoko class heavy cruiser. the Brooklyn class was also constructed at under 10,000 tons so it can be built under the Treaty's terms. It also has 8 (4x2) 5in (130mm)/25 caliber Dual purpose AA guns, and 8x1 0.50in (13mm) machine guns for AA defense.

 

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during WW2, she still carried 15 6in (150 mm ) main guns and 8 5in (130 mm) dual propose AA guns, but was givin 6 quad Bofors, 2 twin Borfors, and 18 single 20 mm Orikons, to improve AA defense 

Interwar period

Her service was started in 1938, when she was to be assigned with Cruiser Division 8 and maintained routine duties til April a year later (1939). In middle of April, she returned to the US when she participated in the New York's Fair on the 30th later that month. on the May 23rd, USS Brooklyn was ordered to the scene of the Squalus Disaster (where the Sargo class Sub USS Squalus, later named Sailfish, was sunk during a test dive 6 miles south of the Isles of Shoals, New Hampshire) to rescue the ship and crew. It happens for the entire week between the 23rd of May and the 3rd of June, where she steamed to the west coast. There she meet up and joined up with the Pacific Fleet. with the rest of the fleet, she participated on the Golden Gate International Exposition  (the opening of the newly built Bridge) on February 18th of 1940. She served on the Western Fleet til May 1941, where she departed from Pearl Harbor to the east coast where she joined the Atlantic Squadron for escort duty. there, at July 1-7, she escorted the convoy carrying Marines to Reykjavík, Iceland. she repeated it, and also neutrality patrol the western Atlantic for the remainder of 1941.

World War 2 Service 

When World War two started for the US, following Pearl, Brooklyn was immediately sent from Bermuda to patrol the Caribbean sea... In April 1942, she was sent for escort duty for a convoy between the US, and Her Ally, the UK. on September 3rd, on one of the Transatlantic crossings, a Troop Transport- Ship known as USS Wakefield (AP-21) was caught fire, and was abandoned. Brooklyn Rescued 1,173 of the 6,000 troops on the Wakefield...she was towed safely and was repaired, despite of the fire heavily damaged her hull. On October 24th, she departed Norfolk, Virginia for North Africa. on November 8th, she fired her first rounds in anger, and bombarded shore installations to cover the Fedhala landing of Operation Torch (the invasion of Vincy French North Africa). Sadly, it was later determined that Brooklyn fired upon friendly troops (7th infantry)  before the nearby French fort surrendered. the French Destroyers Milan and Brestois, light cruiser Primauguet,  and Submarine Amazone then sortied from Casablanca. Brooklyn, and USS Augusta (CA/CL-31) took the destroyer Milan under fire, tho Brooklyn took some hits by the small caliber rounds. both of the cruisers also damaged the Brestois and Primauguet, where both were either sunk from the damage, or beached. Unbeknownst to the crew, the Diane-class sub Amazone tried to attack the Brooklyn, but missed by far. later on that same day, Brooklyn was bombarding French positions near Casablanca. During the engagement, she was hit by a failed projectile from a coastal gun, damaging two of her guns, and wounded five of her crew.

Following the Naval Battle of Casablanka she departed for the East coast on November 17, 1942, and then was again participated in more escort duties (June-July 1943) the invasion of Sicily (the invasion of Italy, {July 10-14} where she screened and fire support duties ), Anzio-Nettuno landings, (also known as Operation Shingle {January 22-February 9 1944} where the Allied powers captured Rome) and remained at duty in the Mediterranean until November 21, when she returned home in New York and arrived on November 30th, 1944.  

 

She was rewarded four battle stars for her service in World War II

 

Post War

Brooklyn went first from in-commission-in-reserve on January 30, 1946, and then was out-commissioned- in-reserve almost a year later (January 3rd, 1947). She remained there until 1951, when She was transferred to the Chilean Navy under the Mutual defense program. She was renamed O'Higgins, named after the founding father of Chile. and was served for 40 years. She was sold for scrap in 1992, but foundered off Pitcairn Island while under tow to India, where she was to be broken down by ship-breakers.

One of her turrets is now preserved in the Chilean navy base at Talcahuano.

 

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I wish you guys luck with your submissions, there are a few things I would like to address on your submissions (I know I'm not wiki/wg staff so feel free to ignore me if you want)

@Kendrick_Andrade 

The minimum length of the article is 500 words, a quick word count of yours puts it only at 373 words (this is excluding the headers to each paragraph, with them included it's a bit above 380~). I would suggest editing your article in expanding further upon the service of USS Brooklyn to get that magic number of 500 words. 

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Nice job, I do suggest that you go back and fix your grammar though. I found multiple cases of missing capitalization at the beginning of sentences, and also extra spaces at the end of sentences between the last word and period (this: "she said goodbye . Wishing...").  There are also some awkward sentences going on "... for escort duty. there, at July 1-7, she..." 

 

In the end, these are just my suggestions which you can do with what you want. I wish you both luck in this contest :D

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5 minutes ago, Gravtech said:

 

@Submarine_M1

Nice job, I do suggest that you go back and fix your grammar though. I found multiple cases of missing capitalization at the beginning of sentences, and also extra spaces at the end of sentences between the last word and period (this: "she said goodbye . Wishing...").  There are also some awkward sentences going on "... for escort duty. there, at July 1-7, she..." 

 

In the end, these are just my suggestions which you can do with what you want. I wish you both luck in this contest :D

I'm working on it... This is my 1st essay since high school  :p

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11 minutes ago, Submarine_M1 said:

I'm working on it... This is my 1st essay since high school  :p

Just making sure that your efforts weren't wasted on a few missed capitals. :) What I plan to do (and what you can do), is google an online proof reader. They're great for catching the things that you might overlook due to rereading your work too many times (it saved my butt for a few important projects). :cap_like:

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