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Ode to Snowball

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Ode to Snowball

A fluffy kitten, just stray
A tiny ball of snow. One day
Was brought home to a girl so blue
And grew to be her best friend true

Sometimes sitting on the couch
Or running down the hall
Staring out the window panes
Or curled up in a ball

But time passed, the girl grew up
And he kitten she grew old
The poor thing shivered in the night
And her food she could not hold

Then came a time she could not stand
And the girl knew she must go
But it broke her heart in two
To lose her lifelong friend
 
The sages say that those who pass
Mayhaps return some day
If so, then perhaps time will find
A kitten come to play

Then shimmering deep in eyes so bright
And in a purr so soft and low
She may just find a tone of love
From a friend lost long ago

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So this got an "angry," then poetry has done its job because its purpose is to engender emotion.

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it's about time poetry started doing its job again...

....it's sure not picking up the tab in the 21st century...

...anyway no serious poetry in English has end-line rhymed 

in 100 years....(see e. e. cummings, et alia)

...but then IDK if this was a serious attempt--

and it doesn't matter with poetry...

....well done.

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2 minutes ago, commodore_torakula said:

it's about time poetry started doing its job again...

....it's sure not picking up the tab in the 21st century...

...anyway no serious poetry in English has end-line rhymed 

in 100 years....(see e. e. cummings, et alia)

...but then IDK if this was a serious attempt--

and it doesn't matter with poetry...

....well done.

Thank you. My favorites are poems are from Tennyson, Coleridge and the like, which is why I use the metre that I do. I actually wrote this for someone who had lost her cat after having it for almost 25 years. I wrote it over 20 years ago and had to replicate it from memory so there are a couple of stanzas missing.

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I've never been a huge poetry guy, but I always enjoy Shakespeare and Dead Poets Society has given me an appreciation for Whitman and Frost, and I kind of like John Hollander because one of his poems was turned into a song by one of my favourite bands.

The Eagles have also gotten me interested in Thoreau (Don Henley's a Thoreau fan).

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4 minutes ago, Snargfargle said:

Thank you. My favorites are poems are from Tennyson, Coleridge and the like, which is why I use the metre that I do. I actually wrote this for someone who had lost her cat after having it for almost 25 years. I wrote it over 20 years ago and had to replicate it from memory so there are a couple of stanzas missing.

I prefer free verse, which is like blank verse in that it doesn't end-line rhyme....In free verse, meter and rhyme are out the window for an attempt to say more with less and dispense with the need for end-line rhyme as a mnemonic for the performer/reader...

Blank verse doesn't end line rhyme, but it keeps a meter....which is even tougher to write...

...yah and the thing about serious poetry in English for 100 years is just a trend....some of the greats in the last 100 years could still get away with end-line rhyme if they were good enough to have mastered the fundamentals and say more with less...Robert Frost is an example....as is Wallace Stevens....and Sylvia Plath and Anne Sexton...

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Here's a short one I wrote once while watching some kittens in an abandoned shipyard. 

 

Small cats

Never petted

Play

Under boats

Never floated

 

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On 05/02/2018 at 6:07 AM, Snargfargle said:

Ode to Snowball

A fluffy kitten, just stray
A tiny ball of snow. One day
Was brought home to a girl so blue
And grew to be her best friend true

Sometimes sitting on the couch
Or running down the hall
Staring out the window panes
Or curled up in a ball

But time passed, the girl grew up
And he kitten she grew old
The poor thing shivered in the night
And her food she could not hold

Then came a time she could not stand
And the girl knew she must go
But it broke her heart in two
To lose her lifelong friend
 
The sages say that those who pass
Mayhaps return some day
If so, then perhaps time will find
A kitten come to play

Then shimmering deep in eyes so bright
And in a purr so soft and low
She may just find a tone of love
From a friend lost long ago

That's so sad and lovely. Thanks for sharing!

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T.S. Elliot

Gerard Manley Hopkins

Lawrence Ferlinghetti

W.B. Yeats

and the power of the Romantics.

These are a few of my favorite things.

 

Maybe the missing stanzas will come back to you.

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